Writing task 2 - pre-course assignment: common errors, points arising etc.	

Academic style or not?

By the way...	To be honest...	In my opinion...*	Don't watch too much TV!	
As you know...	It is widely believed...	Don't you agree?	...isn't it?	
*Not really academic style, but  suitable for IELTS Writing Task 2

Can you find these common errors?

	Example	language area	
1	Most of people watch TV almost every day.
Most people watch TV almost every day.	Quantifiers	
2	TV provides lots of employment for citizens.
TV provides lots of employment (for people).	Vocabulary	
3	Watching TV would expand our outlook.
Watching TV can expand our outlook.	Modal auxiliary verbs	
4	People will watch TV late at night. They will lose sleep and they will be tired at work.
People watch TV late at night. They lose sleep and they are tired at work.	Present simple tense	
5	The cartoon are bad for children.
Cartoons are bad for children.	General statements	
6	TV will make people become illiteracy.
TV will make people become illiterate.	Parts of speech	
7	TV also destroys our cultural.
TV also destroys our culture.	Parts of speech	
8	TV could help people to relax.
TV can help people to relax.	Modal auxiliary verbs	
9	Television could injure our eyes.
Television can injure your eyes.	Modal auxiliary verbs / we - you 	
10 	Cartoons would include some violence.
Cartoons sometimes include some violence.	Modal auxiliary verbs	
11	TV is also a good thing. It is because people need to relax.
TV is also a good thing. This is because people need to relax.	It / this is becuase	
12	Despite some programmes are bad, however, some TV shows can teach the children.
Although some programmes are bad, some TV shows can teach  children.	Contrast linkers /
General statements	
13	TV effects our life.
TV effects people's lives.	General statements.	
14	TV make us not to do anything energetic such as sports.
TV stops us doing anything energetic such as sports.	use of 'make'	
15	If people will watch too much TV, they will become lazy.
If people watch too much TV, they  become lazy.	Zero conditional	
16	Many TV programmes are showing crime and violence.
Many TV programmes show crime and violence.	Present tenses	
17	I shall attempt to look at both the positively and negatively affected the cultural.
I shall attempt to look at both the positive and negative effected on the culture.	Parts of speech	
18	We spend many times on TV.
People spend a lot of time watching TV.	General statements / quantifiers with countable and uncountable nouns