ACGE - In-class assignment 3 – common errors

I heard you has won two million dollars from the Mark Six.	
Congratulation you won the Mark Six!	
It is glad to hear you won the Mark Six.	
It is a good news that you have won the Mark Six.	
You would like to donate all your money to a good cause which is HK$2 million.	
I can give you some suggestion about your donation.	
I have joined Elderly Care Association since last year.	
It aim helping the poors in the society.	
We provide elderly home for elder with no relative.	
Our organization would provide support for poor children.	
Every year our organization have some charity event for raising money.	
All donation will not be spent on administration.	
Help the disable is very meaningful.	
I highly recommend you to consider donate HK$2 million to Sick Children Support Centre.	
On the other hand, the UNICEF is a meaningful charity.	

Answers	

I heard you have won two million dollars on the Mark Six.	
Congratulations on winning the Mark Six!	
I’m glad/ It’s good to hear you won the Mark Six.	
It is a  good news that you have won the Mark Six.	
You would like to donate all your money, which is HK$2 million, to a good cause.	
I can give you some suggestions about your donation.	
I have worked for / been a member of  The Old People’s Care Association since last year.	
It aims to help /It’s aim is to help the poors in the society.	
We provide run / build   old people’s homes for elderly people with no relatives.	
We would provide support for poor children.	
Every year we organize / hold some charity events to raise money.	
None of the money will be spent on administration.	
Helping the disabled is very worthwhile.	
I highly recommend that you consider donating HK$2 million to The Sick Children Support Centre.	
UNICEF is also a worthwhile charity.