Formal and informal language: making announcements

Situation:
You have called a short meeting of colleagues to make a number of short announcements.
Look at your notes below and decide what you are going to say.

(1) Introduce the meeting

2)	Changes to remote log in system for the company computer network. From Monday staff use security number on plastic card (they were given this last week). Remind them to keep it with them. If they don't have the number they can't log on.

3)	Parking problems over past week. Do not park cars in front of green gate to left of car park – it must be kept clear for deliveries.

4)	Christmas arrangements: time of Christmas party changed from Tue 18th Dec – Thur 20th Dec. Starts at 8. Husbands, wives etc. encouraged to come.

Now look at these two possible ways of making the announcements.
Which do you think is best? Why?
Note down the differences in vocabulary, phrases and grammar.

Example 1

Good afternoon, ladies and gentlemen. We are gathered here today to discuss some minor matters relating to the company's operation.

The first point on the agenda relates to the remote log-in system for our company's computer network. Pleased be informed that from the coming Monday, you must use the new security number on the card with which you have recently been issued. Failure to use the card correctly will result in an inability to log in. So please be reminded to carry your card with you at all times.

The second point concerns car parking. It is my duty to inform you that you may not under any circumstances park your motor car in front of the green gate. This will impede the progress of delivery vehicles, which as you know are essential to the efficient operations of our company. So kindly be reminded to park your car elsewhere.

At last, it is my pleasure to inform you that our company's Christmas party will be held on Thurdsay 20th December. Please note that this time has been changed from Tuesday 18th December. You are cordially invited to bring your spouses and other partners.

If there are no matters arising, that concludes our meeting.

Example 2

Hi everybody, and thanks for giving up your time to come. I know you're all very busy. There are a just a few things we need to discuss so I'll try not to take up too much of your time.

First of all, I'd like to tell you about the changes we've made to the remote log in system for the computer network. If you're logging in at home or away from the office, from Monday you'll need to key in your new security number – that's the one on the plastic card you should have been given this week. So do make sure you keep that card with you, otherwise you won't be able to log in.

Um, what else...?

Oh yes,  there have been a few problems with parking over the last week so  I'd like to ask you not to park your cars in front of the green gate on the left of the car park as this needs to be kept free for deliveries.  I know it's sometimes difficult to find a place to park, but this gate really must be kept clear, so it would be appreciated if you could make sure you don't park there.

Finally, Christmas is almost upon us once again and so as usual there'll be a few celebrations here in the week coming up to Christmas. Most important, can I remind you that the Christmas party will now be on Thursday 20th  December and not Tuesday the 18th as originally planned. We'll be starting at 8 o'clock and I hardly need say husbands, wives, girlfriends, boyfriends are of course, very welcome...necessary in fact!

I think that's it from me. Is there anything anyone would like to say? No? Right, thanks very much.